Received: from [209.75.187.203] (HELO ) by MDCCLXXVI.com (Stalker SMTP Server 1.8b6) with SMTP id S.0000264785 for <6Tarchive@CyberSpaces.net>; Wed, 21 Jul 1999 23:10:04 -0700 Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 23:10:01 -0700 Subject: 6Traits Digest #32 - 07/21/99 From: "SixTraitsMailring" <6Traits@> To: "SixTraitsMailring" <6Traits@> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=iso-8859-1 Content-transfer-encoding: quoted-printable Sender: <6Traits@> Precedence: Bulk List-Software: LetterRip Pro 3.0.5 by Fog City Software, Inc. List-Subscribe: List-Digest: List-Unsubscribe: Message-Id: 6Traits Digest #32 - Wednesday, July 21, 1999 [Fwd: Now I sit me down in school] by "Robin" Re: 6Traits- Letter writing activities by "Kathy Renfrew" Re: 6Traits- word choice assignment by "Gray" Re: 6Traits- word choice assignment by Letter writing activities url by "Susan Nixon" <susan@desertskyone.com> Re: 6Traits- Letter writing activities by 6Traits- ***Word Choice #3*** Assignment - 11/20/99 by Re: 6Traits- word choice assignment by "Gray" Ideas Strategies - last call by "Susan Nixon" <susan@desertskyone.com> Word Choice - Example #1 by "Susan Nixon" <susan@desertskyone.com> Word Choice - Example #2 by "Susan Nixon" <susan@desertskyone.com> Word Choice - Example #3 by "Susan Nixon" <susan@desertskyone.com> Word Choice - Examples #4 & #5 by "Susan Nixon" <susan@desertskyone.com> Re: 6Traits- Ideas Strategies - last call by Word Choice #3 by "Barbara D. Martin" Word choce by "Susan & John Osvald" some new pages by "Susan Nixon" <susan@desertskyone.com> Re: 6Traits- Pet Peeves by Re: 6Traits- The word said - proposal by Re: 6Traits- Pet Peeves by "Susan Nixon" <susan@desertskyone.com> ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: [Fwd: Now I sit me down in school] From: Robin Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 07:34:15 -0400 Friend sent this to me. As I get ready to go back to school (August 2) I thought it was worth sharing. Robin WRITTEN BY A 12 YEAR-OLD-GIRL in Boston Now I sit me down in school Where praying is against the rule. For this great nation under God Finds mention of Him very odd. If Scripture now the class recites It violates the Bill of Rights. Anytime my head I bow Becomes a federal matter now. The law is specific; the law is precise. Praying out loud is no longer nice. Praying aloud in a public hall Upsets those who believe in nothing at all. In silence alone we can meditate And if God should get the credit-great! They are bringing their guns; I don't dare bring my Bible, To do so, might make me liable. So, now Oh Lord, this plea I make; Should I be shot in school, My soul please take. ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- Letter writing activities From: renfpea@pop.k12.vt.us (Kathy Renfrew) Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 07:48:24 -0400 >If you teach your students letter writing, you might be interested in = this >site: > >http://209.79.64.150/webclass/student01/index.html > I got the message 404-not found on this server. Anyone else?? Kathy Renfrew Peacham Elementary School Grade 5/6 ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- word choice assignment From: "Gray" Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 07:53:17 -0400 This is a multi-part message in MIME format. ------=3D_NextPart_000_000E_01BED34E.17CA5B40 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=3D"iso-8859-1" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable This selection is about a hurricane that happened in 1938 in the Long =3D Island area. It is from Hurricanes by Patricia Lauber.(reading level - = =3D 4th grade) =3D20 Rushing water crushed the docks at the head of the bay. Hundreds of = =3D boats were torn from their moorings, slammed against one another, and =3D turned into splinters. The sea took on an eerie glow as it swallowed automobiles with their = =3D headlights on. Windows burst, and broken glass was driven through the =3D air. Chimneys crumbled in showers of bricks around people clinging to =3D cars, lamp-posts and trees. The hurricane sped up the Connecticut River valley, tearing off =3D roofs, shattering shop windows, felling trees, flattening crops. With =3D rain falling in torrents, streams swelled and burst over their banks, =3D flooding towns. Roberta Gray Grade 2, Geneva, Ohio rgray7@alltel.net gray_ro@mail.neomin.ohio.gov http://www.neomin.ohio.gov/~geneva/spencer/clasroom/mrsgray/index.htm ------=3D_NextPart_000_000E_01BED34E.17CA5B40 Content-Type: text/html; charset=3D"iso-8859-1" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable
This selection is about a hurricane that happened in 1938 in the =3D Long=3D20 Island area.  It is from Hurricanes by Patricia =3D Lauber.(reading=3D20 level  - 4th grade)
 
    Rushing water crushed the docks = =3D at the head=3D20 of the bay.  Hundreds of boats were torn from their moorings, =3D slammed=3D20 against one another, and turned into splinters.
    The sea took on an eerie glow as = =3D it=3D20 swallowed automobiles with their headlights on.  Windows burst, and = =3D broken=3D20 glass was driven through the air.  Chimneys crumbled in showers of = =3D bricks=3D20 around people clinging to cars, lamp-posts and trees.
    The hurricane sped up the =3D Connecticut River=3D20 valley, tearing off roofs, shattering shop windows, felling trees, =3D flattening=3D20 crops.  With rain falling in torrents, streams swelled and burst =3D over their=3D20 banks, flooding towns.
Roberta Gray
Grade 2, Geneva, Ohio
rgray7@alltel.net
gray_ro@mail.neomin.ohio.gov= =3D
http://www.neomin.ohio.gov/~geneva/spencer/clasroom/mrsgray/index.h= =3D tm
------=3D_NextPart_000_000E_01BED34E.17CA5B40-- ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- word choice assignment From: AnnMath@aol.com Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 11:13:07 EDT Great word choice in the hurricane piece, Roberta. VERBS galore! Ann 5th Maryland ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Letter writing activities url From: Susan Nixon <susan@desertskyone.com> Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 08:26:26 -0700 At 07:48 AM 7/21/99 -0400, you wrote: >>If you teach your students letter writing, you might be interested in = this >>site: >> >>http://209.79.64.150/webclass/student01/index.html >> > I got the message 404-not found on this server. Anyone else?? I got the same message from Molly. When I clicked on it, it went right to the site. However, I closed Netscape and then reopened it, so that the cache copy was gone, and I, too, get 404. I backed up the address a step at a time. The pages are there, but they all appear empty. When I backed it up far enough, I got the apple.com site. I sent a message to tech support about broken links. We'll see = what happens. I apologize. It worked perfectly the first time I got there, but I don't remember what I was doing or how I got there! I may have linked from another writing site. =3D( If I find it again or hear from apple, I'll let you know. Susan ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- Letter writing activities From: CommLIT@aol.com Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 12:51:20 EDT In a message dated 7/21/99 11:43:15 AM, renfpea@pop.k12.vt.us writes: <<>If you teach your students letter writing, you might be interested in = this >site: > >http://209.79.64.150/webclass/student01/index.html > I got the message 404-not found on this server. Anyone else?? >> I took received the same message! ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: 6Traits- ***Word Choice #3*** Assignment - 11/20/99 From: MBShelow@aol.com Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 13:34:58 EDT Level - 1 - Beginning (Not Yet) The writing shows an extremely limited vocabulary.Only the most general = kind of message is communicated because of vague or imprecise language. Words may = be used incorrectly changing meanings. Level 2 - Emerging Language is monotonous and/or misused, detracting from the meaning and impact. Images are fuzzy or absent. Level 3 - Developing Language is quite ordinary, and is lacking interest and precision .The = writer does not employ a variety of words, producing a sort of "generic" paper filled with familiar words and phrases. The writing amy be accurate, but not = interesting to the reader. Level 4 - Competent Words effectively convey the intended message. The writer employs a variety of words that are functional and appropriate to audience and = purpose. The writer attempts to use more colorful language, but is not very = effective. Level 5 - Experienced Words convey the intended message in an interesting, precise, and natural way appropriate to audience and purpose. The writer employs a broad range of words which have been carefully chosen and thoughtfully placed for = impact. The words energize the piece and keep the reader's interest. The words are = used in fresh, interesting ways. Words form clear pictures in the reader's = mind. Level 6 - WOW! Words convey the intended message in an exceptionally interesting, = precise, and natural way appropriate to audience and purpose. The writer employs a rich, broad range of words which have been carefully chosen and thoughtfully placed for impact. Words create strong pictures and capture = the reader''s interest to read further. Language may be ordinary words used in = an unusual way or figurative. Mindi and Cathy looping 1st ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- word choice assignment From: "Gray" Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 17:09:29 -0400 This is a multi-part message in MIME format. ------=3D_NextPart_000_00CF_01BED39B.CAF68DE0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=3D"iso-8859-1" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable "While he still gazed upward into the deep arch of the firmament and had = =3D lifted his hands to pray, a cloud, though no wind was stirring, hurried = =3D across the zenith and hid the brightening stars. The blue sky was still = =3D visible, except directly overhead, where this black mass of cloud was =3D sweeping swiftly northward. Aloft in the air, as if from the depths of = =3D the cloud, came a confused and doubtful sound of voices." from Young =3D Goodman Brown by Hawthorne Jackie Meehan Grade 2, Geneva, Ohio ------=3D_NextPart_000_00CF_01BED39B.CAF68DE0 Content-Type: text/html; charset=3D"iso-8859-1" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable
"While he still gazed upward into the deep arch of = =3D the=3D20 firmament and had lifted his hands to pray, a cloud, though no wind = was=3D20 stirring, hurried across the zenith and hid the brightening stars.  = =3D The=3D20 blue sky was still visible, except directly overhead, where this black =3D mass of=3D20 cloud was sweeping swiftly northward.  Aloft in the air, as if from = =3D the=3D20 depths of the cloud, came a confused and doubtful sound of =3D voices."  =3D20 from Young Goodman Brown by Hawthorne
Jackie Meehan
Grade 2, Geneva, Ohio
------=3D_NextPart_000_00CF_01BED39B.CAF68DE0-- ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Ideas Strategies - last call From: Susan Nixon <susan@desertskyone.com> Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 15:51:48 -0700 I'm about to begin working on the web pages for the ideas strategies. I haven't checked the mailbox, but I have the impression that there are = fewer here than there were with voice. If you have any other idea ideas, please send them. =3D) If you sent an idea for voice, and you don't see it on = the pages, please remind me and I'll look for it. I found one that I will = add. It was in the wrong mailbox. =3D) Ditto on said and asked synonyms. http://6Traits.CyberSpaces.net/ Susan Nixon 2nd Grade Phoenix, AZ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Word Choice - Example #1 From: Susan Nixon <susan@desertskyone.com> Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 15:55:57 -0700 My Stereo The thing I like most is my sterio its really cool. I got it for Christmas. I was so supprised that I got it. I never got a radio for Christmas before. I got a watch to for Christmas. I like my watch it has buttons and stuff on it. I like my sterio the best though. Because its the most expensive thing I got for Christmas. My sisters got me the = watch. I think I like the most is my sterio and my watch. I like my sterio the most because it is loud and I just about break the windows of our house. = I like my watch because it beeps every hour and it bugs the teachers to death. I like my radio and watch both. My watch that I got is digital. My radio goes realy loud it has 4 speakers. Its Am, Fm sterio dual = cassete player. It has an amplifier right by the speakers. Everyone likes my sterio because its dual cassete and its realy neat. Every like my watch = to because it has buttons on the top of it. ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Word Choice - Example #2 From: Susan Nixon <susan@desertskyone.com> Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 15:57:48 -0700 Night in the Forest The moon shimmers gleamingly over the forest as the shining silvery streaks come down through the trees and the animals scampering to their homes scattered about the woods. The sounds heard are the whooo-whoo of the owls and the gurgle and babble of the brook running through the = forest. The wind whistels quietly through the trees as the foggy mists enter the woods. The wild flowers have closed up for the night. Little twigs on = the ground are crackling because a deer has come out to get a drink from the brook. Then it goes back to its home in the forest. Morning is coming. ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Word Choice - Example #3 From: Susan Nixon <susan@desertskyone.com> Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 16:11:54 -0700 This is another journal entry, not mine this time, but my son's. It recounts what happened to him last Friday night. I will tell you more about him, after you evaluate this example for word choice. Again, be honest. You aren't hurting anyone's feelings. =3D) >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>= > >>>>> Like Anne Sexton, I have now spent time in Bellevue. Like her, it was because I was whacked in the head. In my case, however, the wacking was litteral... and done with a hammer. I had gotten off work at midnight, and I walked up Church Street to get supper at the Subway resteraunt that stays open late. Then, because it was a beautiful night, and I like walking the streets of Manhattan, I walked = up to Canal Street, and went into the subway entrance at Broadway and Canal. And, because I was tired, and it was late, I made a mistake. I pulled out my book, and started reading as I walked. I've written before about the Canal Street station, about the long walk you have to make on the disused platform to go from the entrance to where you catch the uptown 6 train. And, as I said, I was walking along, reading my book. You see, I'd come to the mistaken feeling that New York was Safe, that subway stations were Safe, that I would come to no harm. The hit was so hard I heard it. A sudden, ringing sound, and a burst of = red light. I thought that I'd been hit by construction debris falling from the overhead. Naturally, I fell to my knees and elbows; my hands went to my head. I was just intending to see what had struck me, when I was hit = again. This blow caught me glancingly across the temple, and most of the force = was caught by my left forearm. At that, I realized that I was not alone in the tunnel, and that I was being attacked. I kicked out wildly, my body acting without any real direction from my mind. I somehow managed to knock the weapon out of my attacker's hand, and he ran to pick it back up. I managed to see what it was then; a claw hammer of the type carpenters use to drive and pull = nails. He didn't hold it very well, grasping it in the middle of the shaft = instead of at the end. I said the only thing that came to mind, "Why? Why are you doing this?" In = my befuddlement, I thought it was personal. I thought it was a hate crime, that he was hitting me because for some reason he thought that I was gay, or because I was white and in the wrong neighborhood. Instead, he told me he wanted my wallet. I gave it to him, and he ran = away. I discovered, in those few minutes, that I'm not a hero. I didn't get back up, and fight him. I didn't sense his approach, was completely oblivious that there was even anyone on the track with me. No danger sense warned = me, no untapped reserves of strength and wisdom sprang to my defense. After he fled, I sat there and bled for a few moments. The platform was = now as deserted as it had been when I came in, or rather, as I thought it was when I came in. I pulled out my cell phone, but as I expected, signal was blocked by the heavy concrete walls. I staggered to my feet, went to the closest set of steps, and staggered upward. I got to the ticket booth, before I collapsed, asking the man on duty to call 911. It seemed to take forever before the police showed up. The EMS showed up with them, and they put me on a backboard, and carried me up out of the subway station. As odd as it seems, my first thought on seeing the open sky was that there were no stars. They took me to Bellevue hospital. In the emergency room, they cut my clothes off, and put three dermal staples in the back of my head to close the wound and stop the bleeding. Now, I really don't like the fact that I was smacked in the back of the head and had to go to the emergency room. But I can't say enough good, positive things about the men and women who staffed that emergency room. From the supervising physician to the interns, to the nurses, to the = emt's, to the very flunky who pushed my bed around, every one of the people working there were incredibly kind, incredibly skilled, and just... incredible. If you have to go to an emergency room, go to Bellevue. In time, it was determined that I didn't have a skull fracture, and my arm wasn't broken. A doctor put three stitches in my temple where I'd been grazed by the second blow. ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Word Choice - Examples #4 & #5 From: Susan Nixon <susan@desertskyone.com> Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 16:21:10 -0700 I put these on the same page because they are from the same class and on the same topic. These two poems were written last spring by two students from Molly Godley's class. We had permission to put them on the web site, so I don't think they would mind your seeing them. Evaluate them separately, however. >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>= > >>>>> Loneliness by Tyler Loneliness seems pitch black Like the darkest point of night. I see people pretending I am not there. I hear the cry of an abandoned child. I smell the perfume of the mother I once had. I touch no one and nothing for I am nowhere. I taste nothing. I feel only my own pain and suffering. Loneliness by Nicky Loneliness seems reddish orange Like the flowers the field sprouts. I see no more for I am blind. I hear the stream from behind. I smell the scent of flowers sweet. I touch smooth peebles for a treat. I taste berries as sweet as candy. But I am alone. Alone for life for when I try, they only bite. ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- Ideas Strategies - last call From: Aim246@aol.com Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 20:20:02 EDT Some ideas for teaching first grade....Ideas Strategies...are: 1. Keeping track of ideas that pop into your head during the day...Could = keep them in an Idea journal. 2. Always encourage children to keep their eyes and ears open for = interesting sights and sounds. 3. Children need to have a backpack full of ideas so making as many new discoveries as possible will help in this area...Joining in teams or = groups or visiting new places. 4. Use the clustering strategy by writing a word related to your topic on = a paper and then listing related words and ideas around it. Circle and = connect these words to show how you will write about them. This helps children to stick with their idea and not get off onto other topics. I got these ideas from Writers Express by Kemper/Nathan/Sebranek I use = this book often!!! From Cathy and Mindi (looping k to 1 team) ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Word Choice #3 From: "Barbara D. Martin" Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 19:12:37 -0700 Word Choice 1 =3D limited vocabulary with misused words, meaning is obscured 2 =3D words that are colorless, flat, imprecise, monotonous; images are fuzzy 3 =3D words ordinary, lacking interest, may be inappropriate 4 =3D variety of words that work to convey the intended message 5 =3D appropriate words convey the intended message in an interesting, precise, and natural way 6 =3D exceptionally interesting, richc words convey a powerful message Barbara (I think all the others in my group have quit) ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Word choce From: "Susan & John Osvald" Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 22:16:45 -0500 OK--here goes. I feel as if I'm really sticking my neck out! #1--My stereo 1--general, vague words that fail to communicate, limited, imprecise language #2--Night in the Forest 2--overwhelming reliance on worn expression #3--Journal entry 4--expression that is functional writing has some fine moments and generally avoids cliches #4--Loneliness (black) 3--reliance on cliches and overused expressions (pitch black.. night, smell the perfume) #5--Loneliness (reddish orange) 2--Language is monotonous (scent of flowers sweet, sweet candy) ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: some new pages From: Susan Nixon <susan@desertskyone.com> Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 21:23:49 -0700 http://6Traits.CyberSpaces.net/ Click on strategies, click on Ideas. There are 2 pages up, just a start. About 2/3 of the way down the first page's table, at the end of Joan Matuga's second block, is the blue word "went". If you click on that, it takes you to a page of words to substitute for went. This hard work was done by Joan and her third grade students. Say thank you! It's great, = and it's similar to the pages I will set up for said and asked. I noticed I forgot a return button, so until I get one in, just click the back button on your browser. *Don't* click on the big what's new for said and asked. They aren't up yet. =3D) Susan Nixon 2nd Grade Phoenix, AZ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- Pet Peeves From: Joan3teach@aol.com Date: Thu, 22 Jul 1999 00:29:04 EDT I am puzzled about I wish I "was" or "were". Gramatically, it would seem that If I was was better, but "were" sounds better. Any ideas? ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- The word said - proposal From: Joan3teach@aol.com Date: Thu, 22 Jul 1999 00:47:27 EDT Susan, I sent you my list for the word "went" Here is my list for the word "said". I hope this is of interest. Verbs to Use Instead of "Said" added admitted apologized argued asked barked began bellowed bragged cackled called chanted chattered cheered chuckled commented complained concluded confessed cried dared decided declared denied dictated exclaimed explained giggled grinned groaned growled grumbled guessed hinted hissed hollered howled hummed insisted instructed interrupted joked laughed lied listed moaned mentioned mumbled murmured muttered nagged ordered persuaded pestered pleaded praised prayed promised pronounced questioned quoted recalled remembered repeated replied reported responded requested roared sang scolded screamed screeched shouted shrieked snapped sneered spoke stated stuttered suggested talked taught teased thanked thought told wailed whimpered whined whispered whistled wondered yelled Joan Matuga ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- Pet Peeves From: Susan Nixon <susan@desertskyone.com> Date: Wed, 21 Jul 1999 22:04:56 -0700 At 12:29 AM 7/22/99 EDT, you wrote: >I am puzzled about I wish I "was" or "were". Gramatically, it would seem = >that If I was was better, but "were" sounds better. The rule is after if and wish, use were. It's I wish I were and if I = were. "I would that I were smarter," also works. =3D) But no one uses that construction that any longer. It has to do with the special verb tense, but that was freshman English and that was *decades* ago (when we had to diagram sentences, but we surely understood how the language went together!), so don't ask me to remember that part! Susan ---------------------------------------------------------------------- End of 6Traits Digest