Received: from [209.75.187.203] (HELO ) by MDCCLXXVI.com (Stalker SMTP Server 1.8b6) with SMTP id S.0000268739 for <6Tarchive@CyberSpaces.net>; Mon, 26 Jul 1999 23:04:09 -0700 Date: Mon, 26 Jul 1999 23:10:01 -0700 Subject: 6Traits Digest #37 - 07/26/99 From: "SixTraitsMailring" <6Traits@> To: "SixTraitsMailring" <6Traits@> MIME-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=iso-8859-1 Content-transfer-encoding: quoted-printable Sender: <6Traits@> Precedence: Bulk List-Software: LetterRip Pro 3.0.5 by Fog City Software, Inc. List-Subscribe: List-Digest: List-Unsubscribe: Message-Id: 6Traits Digest #37 - Monday, July 26, 1999 6Traits - ***Sentency Fluency #1 - 7/26/99*** by "Fran Regos" 6Traits-***Voice #2 - 7/26/99***Assignment*** by "Fran Regos" Assignment - Sentency Fluency Example by "Gray" (no subject) by "The Sauer Family" ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: 6Traits - ***Sentency Fluency #1 - 7/26/99*** From: Fran Regos Date: Mon, 26 Jul 1999 09:01:55 -0700 Hello, all, Here I am in sunny, Southern California! Before going off for a day of = fun and games, I'm sending you the first messages about Sentence Fluency. To make it short and sweet, Sentence Fluency gives a piece: Rhythm, flow, and natural cadence Smooth phrasing Well-built sentences Sentence length that enhances the meaning Varied sentence beginnings Easy-on-the-ear flow, poetic, musical To expand on that a bit: 1) Listen for the rhythm and cadence, even if the punctuation is not yet present or correct. 2) Sentences begin in differnt ways and often end in a noun or a verb. 3) Creative and varied use of sentence length and structure provides interest. 4) The rhythm and cadence in the sentences underscores the important = ideas. 5) Fragments are deliberate and add style & flair as suited to the topic and audience. The key question you might ask yourself to identify whether a piece has fluency or not, is: Can you *feel* the words and phrases flow together as your read it aloud? Susan Nixon 2nd grade Phoenix, AZ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: 6Traits-***Voice #2 - 7/26/99***Assignment*** From: Fran Regos Date: Mon, 26 Jul 1999 09:03:11 -0700 Here are some examples of short student writing which showcase sentence fluency: "In yesteryear, when Moby Dick was just a tadpole and the seas rolled and thundered over the jetties and onto the shore...." (sounds more like = great word choice, doesn't it?) "In my old battered black wallet I carry many things. A letter from a friend. My lunch ticket. My social security card. Many other tidbits = and items as well. There is one thing, however, which I prize above all my possessions. It is a photograph. It's small, and the photographer was = not good. That does not matter. What matters is the person in the = photograph. His name is Brian Sizemore...." "What is poetry? Poetry is moosick to me on a pees of paper moosick that rimes soft moosick to my ers" Did you feel the words and phrasing flowing together as you read? Did you read it aloud? Did it feel natural? Individual Assignment: Find a passage from a favorite author which you think demonstrates sentence fluency. Share it with the group. Children's authors, children authors, or your favorite free time reading author. mailto:6Traits@ Susan Nixon 2nd Grade Phoenix, AZ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Assignment - Sentency Fluency Example From: "Gray" Date: Mon, 26 Jul 1999 15:32:34 -0400 This is a multi-part message in MIME format. ------=3D_NextPart_000_00A2_01BED77C.154DF660 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=3D"iso-8859-1" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable This is from Old Turtle by Douglas Wood. . And the argument grew LOUDER and LOUDER and LOUDER... until... STOP! A new voice spoke. It rumbled loudly, like thunder. And it whispered softly, like butterfly sneezes. The voice seemed to come from . . . why it seemed to come from . . . ...Old Turtle! Old Turtle hardly ever said anything, and certainly never argued about God. But now Old Turtle began to speak.=3D20 Roberta Gray Grade 2, Geneva, Ohio rgray7@alltel.net gray_ro@mail.neomin.ohio.gov http://www.neomin.ohio.gov/~geneva/spencer/clasroom/mrsgray/index.htm ------=3D_NextPart_000_00A2_01BED77C.154DF660 Content-Type: text/html; charset=3D"iso-8859-1" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable
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Roberta Gray
Grade 2, Geneva, Ohio
rgray7@alltel.net
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------=3D_NextPart_000_00A2_01BED77C.154DF660-- ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: From: datsauer@computerpro.com (The Sauer Family) Date: Mon, 26 Jul 1999 15:01:18 -0500 For some easy, relaxing summer reading, I picked up "Drums of Autumn" by Diana Gabaldon, mostly because I'm a sucker for time-travel fiction. My favorite all-time book is "Time and Again" by Jack Finney, who has great sentence fluency, but my copy is on loan to a friend. Anyway, try this: "How shall I tell ye what it is, to feel the need of a place?" he said softly. "The need of snow beneath my shoon. The breath of the mountains, breathing their own breath in my nostrils as God gave breath to Adam. The scrape of rock under my hand, climbing, and the sight of the lichens on it, enduring in the sun and the wind. His breath was gone, and he breathed again, taking mine. His hands were linked behind my head, holding me, face-to-face. "If I am to live as a man, I must have a mountain"< he said = simply. His eyes were open wide, searching mine for understanding. "Will ye trust me?" he said. His nose pressed against mine, but = his eyes didn't blink. Neither did mine. By the way, if I were evaluating this for word choice, I realized as I typed it, I'd suggest synonyms for breath! ---------------------------------------------------------------------- End of 6Traits Digest -- To unsubscribe, send any message at all to: 6Traits-off@.