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List-Subscribe: List-Digest: List-Unsubscribe: Message-Id: 6Traits Digest #46 - Thursday, August 5, 1999 Organization Rubric/ Assignment 1 by "Molly Godley" 6 traits - assignment example by "The Sauer Family" sorry! by "The Sauer Family" Differences in traits by "Susan Nixon" <susan@desertskyone.com> Re: ****6Traits- Organization Assignment **** by "Anna Liu" Re: Rubric for Sentency Fluency by "Julia Poor" Re: 6Traits- 6 traits - assignment example by "Dorothy McCorkle" Re: 6Traits- Re: Rubric for Sentency Fluency by Re: Examples-sentence fluency by "Julia Poor" Sentence fluency examples? by ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Organization Rubric/ Assignment 1 From: Molly Godley Date: Thu, 05 Aug 1999 07:49:08 -0400 1:lacks coherence and organization (ineffective sequencing) No beginning, middle and end 2: lacks clear organizational structure (some attempts at sequencing but order is unclear) undeveloped beginning, middle and end difficult to follow 3: attempt at organization but inconsistent structure too obvious beginning, middle and end overused transitional devices 4: clear and coherent organization clear sequencing recognizable beginning, middle and end easy to follow with details that fit 5: organization enhances central idea(s) sequencing is effective inviting beginning that draws reader and satisfying closure order and structure is strong and moves reader 6: organization enhances central idea(s) and its development effective, creative sequencing strong, inviting beginning that draws reader and strong closure order and structure are compelling and moves reader Anna Liu Toronto, Ontario Molly Godley Grade 5 Naples, FL Molly Godley 5th grade Naples, FL ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: 6 traits - assignment example From: datsauer@computerpro.com (The Sauer Family) Date: Thu, 5 Aug 1999 09:43:14 -0500 I'd like to suggest kind of a different example for organization -unorthodox. The book is "A Prayer for Owen Meany" by John Irving. When I first started reading it, it felt distinctly unorganized to me, but when I finished it, I realized that there isn't a wasted word in the whole book - everything is important to the whole book, all the ends are tied up, and every word counts. I'd call that masterful, if unusual organization. What do others think? ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: sorry! From: datsauer@computerpro.com (The Sauer Family) Date: Thu, 5 Aug 1999 09:44:34 -0500 I'd like to suggest kind of a different example for organization -unorthodox. The book is "A Prayer for Owen Meany" by John Irving. When I first started reading it, it felt distinctly unorganized to me, but when I finished it, I realized that there isn't a wasted word in the whole book - everything is important to the whole book, all the ends are tied up, and every word counts. I'd call that masterful, if unusual organization. What do others think? Forgot to sign my name! Debbie Sauer Duluth MN Grade 1 ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Differences in traits From: Susan Nixon <susan@desertskyone.com> Date: Thu, 05 Aug 1999 21:00:38 -0700 For those still having trouble, this may help a bit. It's also from the NWREL, I believe. It's a summary for the traits. *Analytic Traits - What Results Mean* *Ideas* This trait is the heart of the message, the central idea and the support for that idea. Raters look for clarity (the message must make sense), focus (the topic is narrowed to manageable size) and quality details (beyond the obvious orgeneral). *Organization* This is the internal structure - the skeleton of the = piece. Raters look for an inviting opening that gets and holds a reader's attention, sequencing that is both logical and effective, careful linking of one idea or paragraph to another, and an effective ending that ties up loose ends and leaves the reader with something to think about. *Voice* This is the personal quality of the piece, a sense of the writer behind the words - their individual fingerprints on the page. Raters look for a "flavor" or tone appropriate to the purpose for the writing and the audience, a sense of commitment to the topic, involvement in the writing, enthusiasm, and integrity. *Word Choice* Raters look first for correct and accurate use of language, words that are vivid and precise rather than general, and language that is appealing, memorable and noteworthy. Effective, original use of everyday words rate high scores. Misuse of language or over-reliance on the Thesaurus tend to hurt scores. *Sentence Fluency* This trait focuses on the rhythm and cadence of the piece 0- how does it play to the ear when read aloud? Raters "listen" for smoothness and easy flow. They also look for variety and logic in = sentence beginnings, difference in sentence length, and variations in general patterning. *Conventions* This trait reflects the general correctness of the piece. Raters look for writing that has been edited/proofread with care. They check spelling, punctuation, grammar and usage, paragraphing, and use of capital letters. Bear in mind that the last one should only be done *after* the child's paper is ready for publishing. Otherwise students proofread and think = they have *edited* and *revised*. Also, this last trait is the only one that = is somewhat grade dependent. The convention expectations for 3rd, 5th and = 8th are different (and grades in between, as well). We'll talk about that more next week, when we do conventions. Hope this helps to sort it out. Susan Nixon 2nd Grade Phoenix, AZ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: ****6Traits- Organization Assignment **** From: "Anna Liu" Date: Thu, 05 Aug 1999 09:47:06 PDT This is the ending of E.B. White's The Trumpet Of The Swan "...On the pond where the swan's were, Louis put his trumpet away. The cygnets crept under their mother's wings. Darkness settled on woods and fields and marsh. A loon called its wild night cry. As Louis relaxed and = prepared for sleep, all his thoughts were of how lucky he was to inhabit such a beautiful earth, how lucky he had been to solve his problems with music, and how pleasant it was to look forward to another night of sleep = and another day tomorrow, and the fresh morning , and the light that returns with the day." Anna Toronto, Ontario ______________________________________________________ Get Your Private, Free Email at http://www.hotmail.com ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: Rubric for Sentency Fluency From: "Julia Poor" Date: Thu, 5 Aug 1999 21:44:30 -0500 Level 1 - Sentences are difficult to read. Word order makes the piece confusing. Level 2 - The writing is awkward. The reader has to reread to find meaning. Level 3 - Some sentences are a bit awkward. At times the reader has to slow down to make sense of the story. Simple sentences are fine, but more complex sentences are incomplete or fragmented. Level 4 - Much better sentence structure. Oral reading is much easier and more enjoyable, but some repeated sentence structure sounds unnatural. Level 5 - Writing seems natural. Sentences go together easily and are interesting. Level 6 - Writing seems natural and the sentences flow together. Oral reading is fun and interesting to both the reader and the listener. Key ideas are reinforced by sentence structure. Julia Poor Third Grade Indiana jpoor@tctc.com ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- 6 traits - assignment example From: Dorothy McCorkle Date: Thu, 05 Aug 1999 21:56:16 -0500 One of my favorite books! There is a little boy in our church who reminds = me of the child in the book. Dot The Sauer Family wrote: > I'd like to suggest kind of a different example for organization > -unorthodox. The book is "A Prayer for Owen Meany" by John Irving. When = I > first started reading it, it felt distinctly unorganized to me, but when = I > finished it, I realized that there isn't a wasted word in the whole book = - > everything is important to the whole book, all the ends are tied up, and > every word counts. I'd call that masterful, if unusual organization. = What > do others think? > > -- > To unsubscribe, send any message at all to: > 6Traits-off@. ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: 6Traits- Re: Rubric for Sentency Fluency From: DeDe741188@aol.com Date: Thu, 5 Aug 1999 22:56:04 EDT I need the archives. Where can I find them? Thanks, Deirdre 5th grade, Kentucky ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Re: Examples-sentence fluency From: "Julia Poor" Date: Thu, 5 Aug 1999 22:05:26 -0500 This is a multi-part message in MIME format. ------=3D_NextPart_000_016A_01BEDF8E.9FCB3F40 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=3D"iso-8859-1" Content-Transfer-Encoding: quoted-printable Sentence Fluency Ex. 1 Mrs.. 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------=3D_NextPart_000_016A_01BEDF8E.9FCB3F40-- ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Subject: Sentence fluency examples? From: AnnMath@aol.com Date: Thu, 5 Aug 1999 23:22:06 EDT I think I am missing something. Could you repost the flluency examples? Muchos gracias. ann/MD/5 ---------------------------------------------------------------------- End of 6Traits Digest -- To unsubscribe, send any message at all to: 6Traits-off@.